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Originally Posted by Matt Q
... there's also the option of:
I know you dying, I know you too alive.
... An "epic caesura" like what Shakespeare done. Classic "loose" IP, and five clear stresses.
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I still prefer it without the second “I,” but I’m a sucker for regularity. I agree that your “compromise” is metrically clearer than the original and, as such, an improvement.