I have reverted to "the rage" in the last line. Even though many people didn't get the shift in meaning, I decided that I preferred it subtler rather than more obvious.
Perry, it has always been rather confrontational here, which is too bad. I think the level of confrontation has increased recently, but my memory is not always reliable. No one expects to get every poem on a first read. Some are harder than others. Some I never understand. But poems are often more effective if they are a bit mysterious. I tend to lean in the direction of clarity, but I have been trying to allow more mystery into my poems.
Susan
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