Hi Paula, and welcome to the Sphere!
Forgive me, but I have to be brief just now as I'm needed elsewhere, but I agree with all that Mark said.
I definitely think that "aught" and "stout" need to go... along with the initial caps.
Might I suggest "Searching some wilder way to wend the shore", rather than "Willing some wilder way to wend the shore—" ?
But your first poem more than demonstrates that you've found the right place to be. Yay!
Now I have to dash...
Jayne
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