Arrow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I concur with the Rickster. The final revision is exquisite.
I absolutely love reading this aloud. It really comes into itself as music. It's body-driven, a body of sound and emotion. The rhythms are captivating. I'm not even thinking as I read it. I'm carried.
The first line is perfect. As is the last. I love where the last line has come to, the perfectly ambiguous 'sound'.
Yes!
Cally
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