Rick,
Thanks so much for this feedback. I agree with those two changes and will probably add them soon. (Lots going on at the moment.) So glad you liked it! Re the Deep End - lol - I thought I was doing a good deed by posting in it. There was always talk about reviving the Deep End. Probably was a band somewhere by that name that never got off the ground.
It survived all this time after all, being both deep, and an end of something, like the coelanth burping under glass. ;- D
CALLIGRAPHY! So unexpected and amazing to find you hear, a rare moment in time. And I’m thrilled that you too enjoyed this. It was well-worth posting it and returning to the sphere. I spent some time doing prose and my whole heart drove me back to poetry. Nothing else works for me it seems. I’ve been writing more lately, so this gives me hope that I’m not going down the proverbial drain. Ha. That’s probably the best time to write anyway. “Sorrowing down a drainpipe’s ear.” I dearly hope you will post something for the road or maybe all the ceilings of the world that missed you. Xox