More great ideas! I like returning to “decorate” and the original sentence fragments. I’m not thrilled with “scorpion’s hate” because in the next line the speaker is declaring his love, but it will do until I can find something better. Thanks so much for your help, Matt.
P.S. I changed “hosts” in S2L4 yo “bears.” That way the speaker is the victim rather than the perpetrator of the hate.
Last edited by Glenn Wright; 06-02-2024 at 10:42 AM.
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