For some reason, this is a poem I don't understand. Given that everyone seems to understand it, I see that as my shortcoming. I understand that the Phoenix is reborn in fire, and I know what a heart attack is, but those two images don't combine for me.
I do have one suggestion: The word "human" doesn't belong, in my opinion. You could just say "medics" (a very specific word) and everyone will know they are human. Or, to keep the meter, say:
rekindled by the skill of medics
- or -
rekindled by the hands of medics
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