Thank you, Mignon! For your very kind words, and for making me re-think/re-see the inital caps. As you'll see in my revision, I've gone back to small letters. In this instance, you're right that the words and lines need to float. The capitals feel too forceful, or emphatic, to me now. Many thanks for reading, and for always encouraging me!!
Hi Paula! The poem has gone through some substantial revision as all the comments simmered in the pot. And the poem kept calling. You know, often it feels to me like the poem is the teacher and the poet is the student. I think I've been learning from poems all my life, and never moreso than from the ones I'm writing!
Revision posted.
My gratitude to all!!
Cally
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