So glad you lost the epigraph (and hopefully the note). But your revisions haven't improved the poem, which seemed terrific to me to begin with. I was especially distressed that you lost "witch-kid." I'm with those who like Full Sturgeon Moon as the title. When you make this many revisions, it's good to save the original on the thread. I do like the change from semi to colon. I liked "on me tonight" though almost got persuaded out of it.
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