[Glenn Wright]

Hi, Julie—

Lovely work! Nice job preserving the sonnet’s challenging ABBAABBA CCDCCD rhyme scheme. Much easier in Spanish than in English. I like that you got cándidas to do double duty as “white-clad innocence.”

By adding “impermanence,” you offer an interpretation that, when considering the poem as a whole, casts it as a lament for the fleeting beauty of the lovely acolytes. If you had chosen “insouciance,” or “impertinence” instead, it would offer a more subversive interpretation, calling into question the sincerity of the girls’ piety. Maybe I’m reading too much into rubios.

I enjoyed it!

Glenn