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Unread 07-26-2024, 06:25 AM
James Brancheau James Brancheau is offline
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Do you need east? I might find the close more effective without it. Yeah, I like this a lot. Cameron said it well—the power to enthrall, indeed. With the belly so focused on, the water, transformation, etc., I can’t help but think of birth and/or rebirth as well. And I agree that you should drop boat—the beautiful gunwales part should make that clear anyway, along with other images. I wonder if this is playing at all on the tradition of referring to boats as female ?? Anyway, I think this strong work, Christine. Much enjoyed.
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