It is hard to critique something like this, N. Because you are writing something that seems to be a sincere imitation of 16th century verse, with no sense of ironic commentary or comic anachronism, the only success criteria is 'does it sounds like it was written by someone who has been dead for 500 years?' In which case, the answer is probably yes. I'm no expert but I've read worse pastiches. But to what purpose? It makes me wonder about your fantasy world. Is it a sort of alternative universe Elizabethan England? Does everyone speak like this?
Edit : we cross-posted and I just read your above response. Well, I have so many disagreements and questions but I'll stick to one. What do you class as "modern"? What's your cut off point?
Last edited by Mark McDonnell; 07-27-2024 at 09:55 AM.
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