N., I'm glad you find our politics and philosophy more congenial than that of the Society of Classical Poets, but unless you also can understand our overall aesthetics, we may not be able to give you what you need. We all have widely varying styles and subject matter, but we tend to agree that archaic language does not have much place in contemporary poetry except in parody or pastiche. I love classical, medieval, and Renaissance poetry, but I don't try to write like it.
Also, I concur with Julie in having small patience for poems that go on and on about women's beauty as a weapon. Back when it was the only weapon women were allowed to have, it may have seemed an interesting trope. These days, not so much. Several times I have read through your poem, but each time the language does not make much sense to me. I understand all the words, but when I try to ask myself what is happening in the poem, I can't figure it out. Milton used dense language and unusual syntax, too, but I can usually follow him much better.
I don't think anyone should tell you what to write about. But if they tell you what they are or are not getting out of what you write, it is worth listening to. We are willing to help if you are willing hear. You don't have to take every suggestion, but if you reject all of them, we can't benefit you.
Susan
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