Thanks for coming back, David. I can't quite see it myself but I accept I might be hearing it in a way I want to hear it. I know "pale" is a strong word to ask to be unstressed but I think in context it works to slow the reader down there. I'd be interested if others have the same issue.
Thanks Carl
Hi Yves,
You're right, the sense is that the speaker has never seen an avacado stone before. This actually happened to me. Someone handed me one and asked me to work out what it was and I couldn't. I don't think I ate an avacado until I was close to 30. The return of the stone at the end isn't supposed to invoke "wonder can be found in common every day things" but suggest a metaphor for how a memory of one day can remain central, solid and strange amongst the mush of years of surrounding memories. Probably over explaining now...
Cheers folks.
I've decided to change "galaxies" to "shipwrecks". It is more in keeping with the imagery. I think I was just enamoured by the alliteration with "ghosts".
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