Michigan's mitten-like appearance is news to me, but I like what you do with it.
Mary mentioned "didactic", and that's what I feel about the first two lines of S2 (which seem a bit vague and fuzzy to me anyway), but (as she also says, I think) the imagery redeems that.
I think I prefer "galaxies" to "shipwrecks".
The whole thing is a gorgeous experience, though.
Cheers
David
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