Glenn! That is too funny. I suppose I wouldn't be here if it had happened your way, but here's a rewritten couplet, just for you:
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One day she met the ocean, slipped inside—
Alas! the lessons didn't take. She died. 
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And thanks, Martin and Susan. I'm very pleased with how this one came out (and with Yellow Arrow's editing process; they helped me smooth out a few little things and make it a stronger poem).