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Unread 08-13-2024, 01:35 PM
David Callin David Callin is offline
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Hi Ralph. I think I'm with Christine here. If you could smooth out the metric hiccups in lines 4 and 6 - not that I'm necessarily a fan of unalloyed smoothness - I think it would hit the reader more effectively.

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David
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