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Unread 08-25-2024, 01:43 AM
Julie Steiner Julie Steiner is offline
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the lion tracks the deer’s pungently scented traces.
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the lion tracks the fleeing deer’s strong-scented traces.


(I think the image of the deer/sinner trying to escape the lion/sin is less clear if you don't include the crib's concept of "flight.")
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