Hi David--
This one is light as air I think, and, since it's so short, doesn't demand much of the reader. I always enjoy the smile you seem to embed in every poem--I can sense the laughter coming before you spring it. Still, I'm with Max on this one. I feel the poem's first stanza was setting a scene that could have gone somewhere interesting but ended in a one-liner. Enjoyable, but barely an amuse bouche.
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