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Unread 09-03-2024, 08:53 AM
Susan McLean Susan McLean is offline
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David, I enjoyed this. The two spots that gave me some trouble were S2L6 and S2L8. The wording of the former sounded odd to me. An adverb instead of "settled" would make it read more smoothly. And I am not sure that the pun in "121" is worth the confusion of momentarily wondering how a couple became a number. It would be clearer to me if you said "we're in 121."

Susan
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