The first line speaks of "lilacs", plural, but then the poem switches to the singular "it" for the duration. That made me stumble a little bit. If you were counting on "Each" in L3 to allow the switch to the singular, I don't think it works since you are still speaking about all the lilacs, not just one at a time.
It may well be just me, but I'm not really getting what you mean in S2.
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