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Unread 09-16-2024, 08:35 PM
John Riley John Riley is offline
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This is a strong poem about experiences that seem actual. The theme is clear and the message is strong. It doesn't matter to me if there were actual nooses because the situation is so clearly delivered the symbols can be real. My only quibble is the very ending. I'd consider cutting the last line and ending it with "routing south," which says it without saying it while the last line now says it redundantly.

Good poem.
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