Mark: Thank you for reading and responding. Yes, this was originally a sonnet that wasn't working, so I stripped some padded IP lines here and there and posted this in non-met because I thought it worked better that way.
Glenn: Thanks for your feedback. Much appreciated. Much to think about. I'm still waffling on the version to go with. I've tinkered a bit more since I posted this. This is still a work in progress.
John: I'm glad you found something to like here. I'm still trying to get the final line right. Thanks again!
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