Given the last few you posted I have pretty strong faith in your ability to construct a solid poem, but I wonder if the subject matter of this one might be too strong for some.
If I were to guess I'd think you'd run into this before, but if not, poems that don't uplift or at least remain neutral can be a tough read. I believe to a lot of poets suicide is generally something they don't want to think about.
That doesn't mean it isn't an effective poem, but maybe worth mentioning nonetheless.
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