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Unread 09-29-2024, 09:37 AM
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Hi Ralph, this is quite good to my mind and is a wonderfully woven true-to-life tribute to the Westwood neighborhood where this scene plays out with regularity, I’m sure.
The characters, starting with the anonymous N who sits in his usual spot outside the cafe working on his script/writing, then Ervin “Magic” Johnson is wonderfully portrayed as a mainstay street person with an irrepressible personality and naturally buoyant attitude, then the cafe owner’s cameo appearance, then the co-ed college student that is casually brought into the story as she passes by, and finally the love-interest Califa is no less than an exotic figure/neighborhood fixture that Magic pays homage to by giving her his plastic cup earnings. All the exchanges are beautifully rendered. A tale well-told.

I love the “small bag of his famous donuts”. Why is it that donuts are often described as famous?!?

I wonder if “skipping” is the right locomotion to describe the co-ed passing by… Maybe “bobbing”?

I also wonder at the word “driving” to describe Magic's movement toward Califa.

Much enjoyed — and I’m a Laker hater! (Celtic lover).

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