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Unread 10-02-2024, 12:22 AM
Glenn Wright Glenn Wright is offline
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Hi, Paula

This brings me back to my one and only trip to the Grand Canyon as a kid.

I like “mom, dad and the kids crouching under the yawning tent of the sky,” but wasn’t quite sure what to make of this sentence:

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Originally Posted by Paula Fernandez View Post
Here at the canyon edge, we are too enmeshed in the lives and needs of others to cash out our ticket to grandeur.
The meshing, cashing, crouching, and yawning seem to teeter on the edge of mixed metaphor. Did you mean to suggest that the cooperative posing and equipment juggling needed to get the perfect family picture interfered with the enjoyment of the natural beauty?

I really like the last haiku.

Quote:
two eagles circling
--wait--
are they vultures?
Glenn

Last edited by Glenn Wright; 10-02-2024 at 01:57 PM.
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