Susan--
I love this forum because I learn all the obscure poetry forms here. Thank you for introducing me to the rondine!
I like this one quite a lot--especially the ostrich plume. I thought the leap to the dazed bride was brilliant. It gave the poor little lilac bush a personality and roused empathy in me for her/it. As always, your craftsmanship is excellent.
My only "hmm" was on the next to last line which "dark shapes and uncertain doom" seemed too vague a fate--perhaps just a filler line. I would have preferred to carry on the metaphor with the lost groom.
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