Hey, John, thanks for the input. I really did want this a bit more focused on an individual (it doesn’t have to be any particular individual…) for this poem. But I was a little worried about the repetition of “your” etc and, as this hasn’t garnered much interest, you know, I’m certainly open to another approach. The poem suddenly started to evolve in some ways and I've been trying to catch up… Thinking about it and very glad you came by.
Happy that it excited you in some way, Jim, and agree re poems—especially if it happens to be yours. If you aren’t surprised, don’t expect your readers to be surprised, that sort of thing… I do think that I needed to make the poem a bit clearer, and, as it turned out, focused. Thanks much for commenting.
Hi Hilary—maybe not quite that straightforward, but pleased that you enjoyed the language. And welcome!
Thank you for your specific comments on how you interpreted the poem, Glenn. Can I say neither? Though I really don’t mind different interpretations. I think, however, I could have been clearer about something and hopefully the revision is an improvement. Appreciate your thoughts.
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