[Glenn Wright]

Hi, Roger and Susan—

Thanks for your positive responses. Sorry to have posted this on the wrong board.

I appreciate your approval, Roger. I have seen some of your translations from Spanish. You are an experienced and very skillful translator. I thought about transposing S1L3 and S1L4 in order to preserve the original rhyme scheme, but it introduces an inversion. Here is the revised first stanza:

One thing is not. It is oblivion
God, who saves the metal, saves the ore.
Moons that will be and those that were before
He codes in memory for His revelation.

Your thoughts?

Glenn