I like this. It's the right sort of poem to be a villanelle, IMO.
I find the title distracting. I get the turtle thing, but it doesn't fit the poem. I started off thinking he was talking to an actual turtle. Maybe that's just me trapped in my prison of literalness, but I don't think so. It's the wrong joke for this poem.
I do like the poem. Thanks for posting it.
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