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Unread 10-26-2024, 01:47 PM
Marshall Begel Marshall Begel is offline
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Richard: Yeah, I had to track down the original to make sense of (especially) the animals. I recommend getting into the Gaelic swing with
https://www.futilitycloset.com/2009/...e-to-scotland/

Barbara, I paced 4 beats in all lines except:
Too few: Nobody knows where he’s been."
Too many: Holding him tight, she says, “This man is mine!”

Otherwise, I got confused by S2:
"Not even Janet?" "Nope, I asked."
as a dialogue between 2 unnamed characters. Maybe just continue the monologue, like: "Not even Janet has seen him around"

Lastly, I wondered why the witch would curse Janet by wishing blindness on Tom, as if his disability would be hurtful to her (or make him less desirable).
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