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Originally Posted by Roger Slater
I'm not sure I know how to criticize this, so I'll just do a fly-by to say I think this is excellent. It's elusive, but the voice has authority and the mood it evokes is both familiar and hard to pin down.
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I agree with this, although I wonder if the close could be a little stronger. Particularly this line:
this morning’s mark on the Hunt-Lenox Globe.
IMO,
Hic Sunt Dracones is enough of a hint, while the close feels like it's trying too hard to make the theme clear. I'd prefer something slightly more ambiguous and vibrant in this spot.