Thanks Barbara,
Yes, the poem isn't really working yet. Part of the problem, I think, its that it's not really clear in the poem what's decaying: the throne, or the heart, or both. Losing the throne would certainly simplify things.
So far, my attempts make it just about the heart itself haven't worked out. I seem to lose a big part of what I'm trying -- and so far failing! -- to get across. Likely this one needs some serious drawer-time.
Thanks again,
Matt
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