I enjoyed this too, Barbara, and wouldn’t presume to improve on the excellent criticism you’ve gotten. Just two trivial comments:
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Originally Posted by Barbara Lee
Air, closed and thick,
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I’ve heard of close air. Is “closed” intentional wordplay?
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Originally Posted by Matt Q
So maybe the poem is saying, here are a list of tells …
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Matt understood what you meant by “a tell,” but I had to stop and think. I’m more familiar with the archeological sense and have never played enough Poker to know that it can also be a telltale sign, a giveaway. Or maybe it’s gained popularity since I left the English-speaking world ...