Unfortunately I don't have much time for detailed critique, but reading this the only standout word for me was 'singular'. It felt a bit removed from the rest of the poem and an unusual way to describe salmon.
The rest of it read pretty well to me, a few word choices here and there that felt not so inspired. But I think you did a pretty good job of keeping the poem fluid and cohesive without much individual phrasing distracting from the whole.
I also enjoyed some of the parts where you used unusual phrasing. I'm on mobile at the moment so it's hard to highlight them.
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