[James Brancheau]

I hear you on the sweetness, Cameron. I had to sit it down and have a nice long talk with it. In the end, I was like, you know, it’s your life, good luck. What concerns me much more is that some things I intended apparently weren’t coming through for you. Particularly the close. As far as the cutting, in a poem like this, my feeling is that just because you can cut, doesn’t mean that you should. You may well be correct, or on to something here, but I’m way too close to this now for such an overhaul. After the dust has settled, I’ll put in the drawer for a significant amount of time, like I usually do, and come back to it with new eyes. I really appreciate your honest take, and will keep your response in mind. Always good to get your opinion, Cam. Thank you.

Thanks for coming back, David. Your longer lines had such a positive impact on the poem. Thank you again. And again.