Hi Jim,
Just stopping in briefly to say how much I like the first stanza's description of the kids staging backstage—such nice details that I don't see any need of intrusive prosody to dress it up. I will disagree with anyone who calls it prosy. I missed my nap today and have to go to bed, but I hope to come back. I have this thing going on in my mind lately about being jarred when seeing the connection/comparison between two conceits in a poem. I called it a necessary artifice when I critiqued one of David's poems. Anyway, I'm too groggy to talk about S2.
All the best,
Jim
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