I think the second stanza is key to the poem. It shows how a child’s world is not all cute and pretty. Children have real worries and anxieties. I think if you were to explore more of the child’s needs, their hopes for magical intervention to make things right between their parents, it would make the poem stronger. Currently, the child’s Guardian Angel might too easily be dismissed as just another cute delusion. I’d like a little more pain I think.
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