Hi, David—
This is wonderful! If only we could find a way to make goodwill and peace on earth permanent, keeping them in a protective sleeve, taking them out and releasing them into the air in moments of need.
I enjoyed your clever rhymes and wry humor in the last line.
One nit: I would delete the comma in S1L1. You don’t want a comma separating subject and verb, and it causes a speed bump in the line that throws off the rhythm (at least, to my ear).
I have always liked this carol, and because of your poem, I did a little research. Ironically, this anthem of peace and goodwill was very controversial when it first appeared, even managing to get itself banned by the Catholic Church for a while. Oh, well.
Merry/Happy Christmas.
Glenn
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