Hi, Rick!
For me, the poem begins at
The metal you reach, the moments you crash,
I found what comes after that surprising and riveting. What comes before that, including the title, spells out "All this is a metaphor — and what a lot of different percussive instruments there are!" in a way that is just a little too on-the-nose for me. I did like the "violence and joy."
The details in the later part of the poem are far more interesting than the lists in the earlier part, probably because I can form a cohesive image of a drummer at a drum kit from the last part, but not the first.
I'm not 100% sure that I wouldn't take "metal" to mean "money" if the poem began at the line I quoted, especially since it's followed by "cash" in the next line. But I don't think that's necessarily a bad thing. The penultimate strophe makes the context unmissable.
(The more regular formal structure of the last three strophes probably appeals to me personally, too, so take my comments with a grain of salt.)
Enjoyed.
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