Mary, I think it works. It is hard when the canon of writers who speak to you is the canon of writers who committed suicide. The one place where it felt like a misstep was at the end of L1, where I think a comma would work better than a period, and in L2, where I think a period would work better than a comma after "grow." The idea in between works better to me as a continuation of the thought in L1, whereas I have more trouble understanding it when connected to "I grew alone."
Susan
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