Rick, I took your suggestion for reordering L4. It does make for a more natural syntax. Thanks.
Glenn, I am glad you liked the contrasts. The celebration was on Nov. 1, the Day of the Dead, and borrowed some details from what I have learned about that tradition. That date was unseasonably warm this year, which made the picnic possible.
Roger, I have tried to address that problem in the revision, though with a different approach suggested by Rick.
Susan
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