Lovely again, Susan.
I enthusiastically second Rogerbob's suggestion to reorder L7–8. It will mess up the nice, orderly abbacddc octave, but who cares? "Ozymandias" doesn't stick to the usual recipe, either.
"Gentle as a balm" and "soothing as a balm" strike me as equally pleonastic. Balms are, by definition, not rough or astringent. "Warming as a balm," maybe?
You might consider using the Spanish name of the holiday—either the traditional Día de los Muertos, or the newfangled Día de Muertos. (Younger generations are now dropping definite articles — e.g., "Estados Unidos" instead of "lost Estados Unidos" for the United States).
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