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Unread 01-03-2025, 05:31 AM
Jim Moonan Jim Moonan is offline
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This poem is in my throat, Susan. Well expressed emotion of the inexpressible.

Repeated readings revealed something I can't unsee: The repetition of "As" to begin the first two sentences. From a critical standpoint, it might be something you can avoid. Just a thought.

I love this poem.

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