Hi Richard,
Having adopted Jim's suggested layout is good, but you've omitted the opening inverted commas in the first two speeches.
Also, reading it again, I noticed that "Delivery," the package recited. "May be achieved... ought to be:
"Delivery," the package recited, "may be achieved..."
and, similarly: "...I decline delivery," she replied, slowly and clearly.
"Automatic reflection period in effect," the package said...
and "See you tomorrow!" it cried. (If tomorrow had a comma after it, it would be "it cried", as I suggested, but it's the same for an exclamation mark. Otherwise "It cried." implies the drone started crying.)
An apostrophe is needed in "The drone's engines restarted"
I've just read it to my husband, who also thinks it's brilliant, so we both say, "Bravo!"
Jayne
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