Hi Hilary.
although I am not sure they are necessary.
I liked their music.
thinking of phrases like "spilt his blood" (do pumpkins have blood?)
Used figuratively, and as a means of misdirecting the reader.
"murdered Jack"
any alternatives?
"scream a scream of flame" - they just seem a little over the top to me.
'a little over the top' felt appropriate for a Halloween poem.
and maybe doesn't need to be explained.
Oh, alright then. But if you change your mind.
Hope some of that is helpful.
Always pleased to have food for thought. Thank you.
RG.
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