I'm not really getting a sense of what sins the other woman is guilty of, other than that she cries and is miserable, and the "real me" laughs. Don't all people sometimes laugh and sometimes cry, even husbands? Unless I know more about what the weeping version of the speaker is like, I must resort to gender stereotypes of women being too volatile and emotional and men being steady and even-keeled.
I'd also go easier on stock phrases, "make...hell", "show the door,""rule the roost.
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