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I had been preparing a comment to post on this poem when Rogerbob said what he said. I had made a similar observation that I wish the poem was told more slant than it is. Keep the ace up your sleeve.
I think Bob's idea is exactly what the poem needs to redress itself — though to do so will run the risk of losing what I think is the beating heart of the poem: humor. It's a superpower in a relationship — especially a relationship that has survived the years.
L2: I love/like the way you discriminate between love & like. Truth.
L7 feels flat. Sing-songy.
Midway through my first reading the Politically Correct Police showed up to tell me there was a stereotype being played out. But I summarily dismissed it (as I almost always do) to allow the honesty of the voice to flower. I like it for its truthfulness. The unvarnished honesty is refreshing.
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