[Glenn Wright]

Hi Jim—

I like the clarity and the vividness of the sensory details. I especially liked “batch of breath and sweat,” “cenote-green,” and “bouldered stream.”

A few minor nits:
1. In L7 should “lime stone” be “limestone?”
2. In L9 should “arcing” be “arching?” “Arcing” is used to describe motion and means either “following the trajectory of an arc” or “forming an electric arc.” “Arching” is used to describe position and means “forming an arch.” You would say “The baseball was arcing into center field.” You would also say “The cat was arching her back.”
3. The last three lines are a bit hard to untangle syntactically. “gliding” in L15 is dangling. I think you mean that the cyclist is gliding, but the only possible nouns that it could describe are “quads” and “vistas.”
4. I couldn’t find a subject for “was told.” Since it is passive, the “something” that was told could refer to the entire preceding noun phrase, but that doesn’t make good sense. It might be more graceful to swap out “was told” for “they said” or “we’re told.”
5. Should “comanches” be capped? You capped the proper nouns that name places.

Enjoyed it!

Glenn