[Yves S L]

Hello Jayne,

Third version is nice! You have added some bite to the voice with the which/bitch rhyme! Interesting flavour, strident and acerbic, which colours and contrasts with the humour, the self-pity, the sadness, and the love. There are so many things you could probably do with this though, and the numerous options means the poem is multi-dimensional, resonating simultaneously on many factors each of which could be tweaked!

I was previously asking for this resonance.